Thank you! My choice of no capitalization is a personal preference, however. As I believe my work is less formal and essentially just my thoughts vomited onto paper, I choose not to use capitalization in my poetry. However, as demonstrated in this comment, I know how to use capitalization just fine. To each their own, though.
I haven't ridden a train since I was too young to remember, but this reminded me of a cross-country bus trip. (Circumstances were very different, and I did buy a both ways ticket.) This was beautifully written, and I feel like it makes you think about everything and nothing all at once.
i too have not ridden on a train in forever! and cross-country bus trip? that sounds super exciting! (i'm glad you did ) thank you so much for your lovely comment and i am so glad it evoked that bizarre feeling of everything/nothing in you. ♥
I really like this. I love the character and the story that you have created, it is a beautiful read. The way you have pulled together all these words is wonderfully done - my favourite part of this piece of poetry would have to be the following:
there were times and dates prices and logos but all i saw was my house my family and everything i used to love because people need to believe that they have someone or something to come home to
i turned around to face those lantern eyes.
It was such a beautiful way to end this piece. It leaves me wondering, however I am completely satisfied with the ending ♥
what a beautiful comment from an equally beautiful writer. i am so honored that you enjoyed my work and i read this comment twice before responding. you definitely put a smile on my face, and it means the world coming from someone with equal, arguably more, talent in writing ♥
it fascinates me about the things people see in the transport industry. especially a taxi driver: taking a last passenger before shifts end, seeing him drunk silly but glances from the rearview mirror the way he looks out the window. it's kind of humbling to think about the amount of lives that simply passes by us and never to be seen again but yet experience a magnitude almost equal to our own. that's the feeling i get from this poem. hehehe anyway thank you for the poem!
yes definitely. i think, at the same time, it's quite alarming. sometimes i feel as though i need to stop and take a moment to just appreciate the world. appreciate each stranger that passes me and the fact that each of them has a family, a job, and above all, a story. we are all individuals and yet we belong to the same species. it fascinates me to know that there are people all over the world who are living, breathing and experiencing the same things as me. however, i feel like if i spend too much time on this subject, my head will just burst! it's definitely a lot to take in.
anyways, thank you for the thoughtful comment as always
ugh i have a thing for stories about public transport, don't mind me. the confinement and solitude of a lonely person in a train or taxi is an emotion i love to explore, i actually find it quite romantic.