it's been a while and this was actually written long ago, submitted into a poetry competition (to no avail) but i love it and it is mine and i hope you enjoy it please forgive my lack of words as of late, they are slowly coming back to me inspired by:[link]
"Her eyes were forever open, as if she never stopped to blink because she was afraid she'd miss something, and the sun sat on her eyelashes like birds on a wire because she told me she didn't know how to cry."
So many beautiful images here and ack I don't really. I. Um. I love you.
thank you so much! and i totally agree, i can relate the most to them. and alas, this poem in particular is not based on a real life experience (though i wish it was ). i actually linked the image that inspired me in the work's description if you would like to view it.
normally though, my stories are loosely based off real life experiences, just because i find those the easiest to describe. however, my life isn't always as interesting as i would like it, so sometimes i have to find inspiration through other forms like music, photography, etc. (:
Ah, I didn't notice the "inspired by" text. That picture is so cool, I see why it inspired you! The fact that not all of them are totally inspired by real life events makes you even more awesome! That's what means to be a good poet/writer, after all, amongst other things.
yes, when i saw it on tumblr i knew i had to write about it and aw thank you so much! you are literally too kind to me. i guess that is true, but i do wish my life were more exciting so then i would have more things to draw inspiration from
'....and the sun sat on her eyelashes like birds on a wire because she told me she didn't know how to cry..' Favorite line in this short story Your stories and poems have a calming effect on me, I always feel at ease after reading them, you have a true talent with words. Can I ask how long you've been creatively writing?
that's my personal favorite line in the story as well! :] i am so glad you enjoyed reading it as much as i enjoyed creating it and thank you so much, you are very kind to me
i have been writing since my third grade librarian introduced me to the world of poetry. however, it's been sporadic and never really focused; i've always viewed writing as an escape, a refuge, and it will always be a passion of mine as i continue to shape my voice
Why must everything you say seem like poetry? Lol, you're so welcome and I thank you for being so kind to me in return. That's very cool, I bet you have thanks to give to that librarian, And I personally think that's the best type of poetry, do you have any favorite poet you admire?
haha it's a habit i suppose? but you are too sweet and yes i have many thanks for the librarian, though i haven't seen her in years! but if i ever write a novel, she will definitely be in the list of people to thank.
as far as poets go, i am a fan of wordsworth. :] i'm afraid i don't know many poets, but i hope to expand my knowledge in the years to come!
>////< Thanks, maybe you can go back and thank her in person one day and hand her a copy! I have never heard of that specific poet and my knowledge of poets is limited because my literature class doesn't focus on poetry as much I'd hope for but I like Elle Hopkins, she writes stories in the form of poetry and her books are relatable for a young teenager like me. And who knows maybe if you learn about the other writing styles of different authors you can draw inspiration from them.
Wow. Nice story-telling. It was very fluid, highly visual. I like that she smells like "cacti-nectar" and that you come back to it again, at least the "scent of desert dunes." At the end, I think you create a kind of suspense, like "is it her?" However, a second path crossed my mind, that it wasn't her and that it was a kind of...representation of what she would be if she ran into her. Like I said, nice story-telling. I think this is almost more prose than poetry (so which is why it might've had trouble in the competition.) However, keep writing! you're very good (and look at how many features you got with this one! ^^) Well-worth it, I'd say. Again, nice writing.
this comment was absolutely lovely<3 and you are so sweet to leave me such a long and thoughtful response i agree with you, this piece is definitely prose and i will definitely keep writing! thank you again for taking the time to write such a wonderful comment
This is beautiful, I love it. I love the line: She told me that when she turned eighteen, she tattooed a map of the world on her shoulder blades and when she saw it in the mirror for the first time she whispered, "Is it really that small?"